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I'm waiting terrified for the last decision,
You gently touch the knife,
My heart is pounding, waiting for the lethal incision,
I almost see the blade shedding the liquid of life,
I hear myself choking with my own blood,
The sound of the knife rending my flesh - a deafening thud.

But your hand goes further; over the axe it leans,
Shining ruthless under your fingers,
I'm about to die, by all means,
A sick suspense lingers,
I almost hear the sound of my breaking bones,
The gushing blood, the moans,
But no; your hand, well, further it goes.

"A gun? "
With it easily it will be done,
Infix the cold metal and let me bleed to death,
"Will it be fun? "
Just imagine the blood outflow until the last breath,
"Or a hammer? "
My body you could simply mash,
But you'll need to endure the blood splash,
That will stain your hands and face.
But instead that, your fingers, they retrace.
"The most lethal weapon isn't any of these",
You say stepping back, as my heart is starting to appease,
"It would be too easier with a gun or a knife",
And you simply smile,
"This is what will erode your life".
Just a poem I've wrote after so much time. I just hope is good enough ^^
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pieceocake Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Student Photographer
This is amazing
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :thanks:
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OfTheFifth Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
I really love this poem. It's got such a dark tone to it in all, but the title deceives what will be read, and I'm fascinated by what I read. The anticipation and the lingering on what will happen until the very last line. It's enchanting. Well done. This is the type of poem I hope to see in my favorite in the future, forgetting I have read, to experience the same emotions once more. I'm excited for it.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :aww:
I'm really glad that you enjoyed so much my poem :)
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JCPablo Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Student General Artist
Kind of sounds like something by ShakesSpear. Love it nonetheless.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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NwgroGuerra Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow I'm speechless this is good!
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :thanks:
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NwgroGuerra Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you are more than welcome n_n I hope you are doing fine, take care.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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