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I'm waiting terrified for the last decision,
You gently touch the knife,
My heart is pounding, waiting for the lethal incision,
I almost see the blade shedding the liquid of life,
I hear myself choking with my own blood,
The sound of the knife rending my flesh - a deafening thud.

But your hand goes further; over the axe it leans,
Shining ruthless under your fingers,
I'm about to die, by all means,
A sick suspense lingers,
I almost hear the sound of my breaking bones,
The gushing blood, the moans,
But no; your hand, well, further it goes.

"A gun? "
With it easily it will be done,
Infix the cold metal and let me bleed to death,
"Will it be fun? "
Just imagine the blood outflow until the last breath,
"Or a hammer? "
My body you could simply mash,
But you'll need to endure the blood splash,
That will stain your hands and face.
But instead that, your fingers, they retrace.
"The most lethal weapon isn't any of these",
You say stepping back, as my heart is starting to appease,
"It would be too easier with a gun or a knife",
And you simply smile,
"This is what will erode your life".
Just a poem I've wrote after so much time. I just hope is good enough ^^
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pieceocake Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Student Photographer
This is amazing
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :thanks:
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OfTheFifth Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
I really love this poem. It's got such a dark tone to it in all, but the title deceives what will be read, and I'm fascinated by what I read. The anticipation and the lingering on what will happen until the very last line. It's enchanting. Well done. This is the type of poem I hope to see in my favorite in the future, forgetting I have read, to experience the same emotions once more. I'm excited for it.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :aww:
I'm really glad that you enjoyed so much my poem :)
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JCPablo Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Student General Artist
Kind of sounds like something by ShakesSpear. Love it nonetheless.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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NwgroGuerra Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow I'm speechless this is good!
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :thanks:
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NwgroGuerra Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you are more than welcome n_n I hope you are doing fine, take care.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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NwgroGuerra Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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Skerppla Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
omg! so awesome!!!! :la:
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:thanks:
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Skerppla Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
you'r great :clap:
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :aww:
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Skerppla Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
np :)
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Lost-Concept Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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Beautifully written, the rhymes are brilliant, very interesting! Well done!:icongoodjobplz:
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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Lost-Concept Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome!:iconimhappyplz:
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Oooh very nice. Title gives it a nice eerie feeling :nod:
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :)
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Depressinglyhappy Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
I think whoever it is is going to mentally torture his victim more than physical. But I don't know how.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, because mentally torture is the worst. Sometimes a smile can hurt even more than the most sharpen blade.
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XPsychoxXChildX Featured By Owner May 30, 2012
This is very good and leaves a very wide spectrum for interpritation! You're very talented!
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :aww:
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XPsychoxXChildX Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
Welcome~
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WhitePhoenixSpirit Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Student General Artist
awesomesauce
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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WhitePhoenixSpirit Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012  Student General Artist
Ur welcome
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meowkittycat478 Featured By Owner May 30, 2012
your poems are worth reading, i'm always wrapped until i get to the end. ^^
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :aww:
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meowkittycat478 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
Your welcome. ^^
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w-anderlust Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Student Writer
After such a long time, I think it's really good :)
And don't worry if anyone else doesn't think it's good enough, if you think it's good enough, and you want to share it with everyone that will read it, it must be good enough to you and that's all that matters :)
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I'm really glad to see that my poem is appreciated; also, you're right :aww:
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w-anderlust Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome :) It deserves to be appreciated by more than just its writer.
I'm glad you think so :) Some people think it only matters what everyone else thinks.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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emanuele23 Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Professional Photographer
compliments, is very good work.....:rose::kiss:
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THFan259 Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks ^^
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emanuele23 Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Professional Photographer
its a pleasure
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