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I burst into laughter,
You're begging me to let you go,
Do you really think this is a joke?
Now is time for you to bow.

Do you remember when you used to call me "freak"?
What made you believe that I'm so weak?
There's nothing bad in being different,
Now, I hope you know how pleased you should be,
To know the real me,
A mad psycho, that's what I am,
And with a bloody murder, that's how I'll end this game.

Do you remember how you used to break me down?
Everyday bit by bit, why you wanted to destroy my soul?
But I didn't let you see my tears,
I turned my back, pretending is not real,
I couldn't let you know my fears.

Now, I hope you won't mind,
If I tear you open wide,
Chop your heart,
Do you remember you did the same?
For your savage death you are the one to blame.

Come on,
Why don't you laugh in my face once more?!
Do you believe now that the wheel can turn?
Well, your whole life is about to bend,
Take a look at my hand,
Is that your miserable life that I'm holding?
With your own blood, you're about of choking.

I hope you'll burn in hell,
Then finally you'll know how I felt everyday,
I hope you'll curse the moment that you came in my way.
Do you remember the words you said?
Now is time for you to whisper a last one,
Before I'll chop your head,
Revenge this time I've got,
Near your corpse you'll write it in blood,
Maybe this will be a lesson for them all,
To think before killing a soul.

-…do you remember?
         -…do you even remember?!
-…for you was it just a game?
               -… you should have thought once more.
-…you're the one to blame!
                   -…think before killing a soul!
Fell free to say your opinion ^^
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darknessoverme666 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012
Riddles. always riddles. I don't a fucking clue what you are talking about. I never did anything to you hurt you, call you a freak, break you down day by day........? I was loving ,caring ,supportive, told you, you were beautiful every day,and built up your self -esteem in several other ways. What possible reason do you have for hating me?
Spit it out,and in English. Then, if you want to kill me, you will have a chance
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Are you fucking insane? What's wrong with you? If you don't get it, well, I don't care. Do you think I wrote that for you? No, I didn't. It's just... a poem. It's not addressed to you; I don't even know you and for sure I don't want to.

I'll be waiting to read your genius poems, I guess you write way much better than me if you thought you have the right to criticize my poem like that. Really, I'm waiting.
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Kuro-Kitsune-sama Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2012  Student Writer
lol thats exactly how i feel
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Great-Lord-Dread Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I can't do this. I'm not critiquing this, I was gonna critique this but now I'm not. If I have to critique one more godawful free verse poem I'm gonna spray my brains across my keyboard. Screw it.
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WhitePhoenixSpirit Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Student General Artist
clam ur self lad. U shouldnt post things like that...take it easy
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sure, I appreciate. But I don't give a fuck ^^ I was about to delete your friendly comment, but I won't do it. If you didn't want to critique my poem, then you shouldn't post this shit neither. I'm extremely sorry if I wasn't able to make you happy with my god awful poem. I should burn in hell for this.
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EiraCandles Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Reminds me of what I think about everyday when people attack me
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, exactly that's about. I'm really getting sick of those ppl who act like they are God, like they are perfect, critizing everybody around and mocking them.So I made this poem;yeah I didn't made such a big thing, trying to change something :D.....,but I felt better
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EiraCandles Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I know what you mean
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pociej Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Love it.. You can't be 15! ;) come on! Admit it!
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