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I look at you, you look at me,
I miss the way we used to be,
I call out your name, but you can't hear,
Even if you're standing there, you're far away from here.

I sit and stare,
I know is not my world anymore,
A glass wall separated our lives,
Built by broken promises and lies,
An impenetrable wall without a door.

How could we let this happened?
When we got this to an end?

But now my world is shattering,
With tears in my eyes,
I'm leaning on the wall,
Waiting for this world to fall.

The sky is coming down on me,
Sherds of sun are ripping off my skin,
From the pain soon I'll be set free.

You stare at me,
But your sight is empty,
I touch the glass wall, waiting to flee,
Or maybe just to drown in my own blood,
Destroyed by my expectations,
In the end that's all I've got.

I close my eyes,whispering "goodbye",
I don't hate you, I never really did,
I smile, even if now for me is time to die.
Waiting for oppinions;each one is appreciated :aww:
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forsakenthedawn Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It's very emotional, and it appeals very well. There's a good use of metaphors and you made everything so visual.
Though, I think you might want to pace yourself some...
other than that keep going. You're a very good writer
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for your words :aww:
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forsakenthedawn Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
ur welcome
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Bluejay96 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Student Digital Artist
*nods* Very, very well done. I nearly cried - this one should indeed be in featured...
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :meow:
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Miss-Ali-cat Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
really powerfuly image i got in my head from this, awesome, i really like it :)
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :aww:
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Miss-Ali-cat Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome :)
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RabbyoSaberwolves Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i think this one will stay with me for awhile, wish it fit i yourgroup... i know ill fav it there!
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RavenSpider Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
it's very pretty. i like it.
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