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The sky is bright, but it's turning into red,
The sun is coming closer,
It seems like the whole world is about to bend.
The earth is shaking, is about of breaking,
Smiling, I look up ahead,
Maybe tomorrow is something we'll not get,
But as long I've got you, I think I'm ready for the end.

They're screaming, running,
Trying to get out alive.
I don't care,
I can see we're about of dying,
This may be the ending,
But I'm sure will come a new start.
There's no use in crying,
So I'll take your hand,
And as long I've got you, I think I'm ready for the end.

The earth is opening, releasing the creatures of the deep,
Flying above us, trying to devour us alive,
But I don't worry, I keep saying "this will be just another trip",
On our shoulders they'll land,
To tore out our eyes,
To cleave our head,
But as long I've got you, I think I'm ready for the end.

The flames of hell seems to come out,
Wanting to quench its blood hunger,
They are desperately running,
From death they think are hiding,
But we'll go right through the fire,
Smiling, I take your hand,
Because as long I've got you, I think I'm ready for the end.
Well,I don't know from where came this,but I wrote it in less than 25 mins.
Honestlly,I Don't know if it's good or no,so I'm wating for your oppinions :meow:
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WhitePhoenixSpirit Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Student General Artist
this was beautiful!
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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WhitePhoenixSpirit Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Student General Artist
ur welcome! ur really good at poetry!
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I appreciate :thanks:
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Nestharon Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2012   Writer
Well, mostly I write short stories and lessons, but poetry...from time to time. Here, this work is quite good, please do not misunderstand me, but as I was reading it, I felt that this could be a very good song lyric.
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I know, it could be a nice song. This one came from nowhere and finished as being different from everything I wrote before :aww:
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:iconnestharon:
Nestharon Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012   Writer
Good to know.
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Tsuki-Tai Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Student Writer
This is comforting in a sick way :) i love it good job :)
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :D
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Tsuki-Tai Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Student Writer
np
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FireBasedKiller4913 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011
that was so cool. XD and thats all i can say, cause my sentences arent as awsome as yours. XD
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :D I apreciate so much :aww:
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:iconfirebasedkiller4913:
FireBasedKiller4913 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011
no prob
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:iconlm0038:
lm0038 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Student Writer
as usual your work is amazing.
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I appreciate :aww:
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MyChemicalRodents Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
As always, poetry done in a short space of time can be perfect or not, but you've made this great!! A grammar check wouldn't hurt of course :iconsweatplz:
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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MyChemicalRodents Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome - always great to read emotional poetry :icondelightfulplz:
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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undeaddidou Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
i like it !!! keep on it haha tnx
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
aw,thank you :aww:
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:iconundeaddidou:
undeaddidou Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011
np , can i take ur skype cuz i'm a new member here , i dont knopw how to use it !!! this is my skype : didou1994didou
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I dont have a skype id.Just yahoo.If is okay like this you can find my yahoo email on my profile,at deviantID :aww:
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undeaddidou Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011
i just sent u a request in yahoo , it's didouundead@yahoo.com
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i accepted it ^^
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undeaddidou Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011
hahah tnx
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RainbowTravels Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this!
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Elezian Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I really like the way this makes you feel. The flow is a little choppy in a few places but it works.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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ravenclaw99 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
this is amazing! i don't know what it is about it, but it really evokes a sense of... peace :meow:
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :D
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ravenclaw99 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011
:D
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Jackal-Lord Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It could use some minor grammatical polishing, but all-in-all it's very good. :D
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :meow:
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Jackal-Lord Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome.
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AlwaysFearless Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
some errors but all in all a good job
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :meow:
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AlwaysFearless Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
your welcome
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silverwind333 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Student Writer
I like it, although there are some grammatical errors :P
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
yeah,there are some.i'll try correct them.
And thank you :aww:
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silverwind333 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Student Writer
No problem! :D
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TearsOfTheAmaranth Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I loved it, it's somehow comforting to read it :)
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks,I'm glad you like,I've been afraid that no one will like it :D
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TearsOfTheAmaranth Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome :)
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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:icontearsoftheamaranth:
TearsOfTheAmaranth Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:hug:
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
holding hands
to face hell

a dark hell take them to the end

I like
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :aww:
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
no problem
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