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I feel like I can't take it no more, here on  the floor I lay,
My days, my nights, the moments of my life,
Lost their color, fade to grey…

Staring at this blank pice of paper,
I see my memories on rewind,
Starting then to write,
What I really feel inside…

I really do my best,
But it seems I just failed this life's test,
I'm nobody and like this I'll stay,
To get up there is no way…

So I spill my life on this page,
The only way to free myself,
From the frustration and rage,
I'll paint and write my memories,
While I'm trying to feel again,
The soft touch of the air's breeze,
But it seems like the time is frozen, all I feel is pain…

As I write,
For a short moment I've felt like everything was alright,
But then I woke up to the real life,
The dark, grim world,
Where I'm always wrong…
Just another poem
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WhitePhoenixSpirit Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student General Artist
Yay!
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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WhitePhoenixSpirit Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Student General Artist
Ur welcome for all of dem!
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SlimT Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this one has better flow then any of your others. Poetic cipher I call these somtimes ;)
One thing you did exceptionally here, is that the whole story fit in the first lines of each stanza. It's got a nice organized and free pattern
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. When I started to write it, the words just started to flow, the rhyme to cross each other; I finished it in less than 30 mins - the poem was almost wrote down by itself :D
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pociej Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
So familiar..
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VeiledInsanity Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011   General Artist
I enjoyed reading this. Great, and unique, imagery. My only suggestion would be to go back and edit :)
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Maybe,is just that I feel different each day,and it's hard to come back at a subject,but who knows?maybe I will:D .And thank you,I appreciate
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Kasttar Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
omg... I am now a fan of your writing!
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Aw,thank you :aww:
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