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I thought you were here,
I thought you would stay by my side,
But It wasn't real,
Now I know I can't hide,
It was just an illusion I've created,
My own happy world, far away from the dark.

When the truth was right in front of me,
I lied to myself telling "this can't be".
I closed my eyes and wished for better,
I wiped my tears realizing this will come true somewhere near to never…
But at the end of the dark tunnel, I've seen a light,
It was a drop of hope,
The hope that kept me alive.

Dream on,
Hanging by the thread of hope,
I've figured out that you're so gone.
Were you even there?
All this time I've been alone,
Holding on by a shadow,
Feeding with memories,
In a world of hollow.

I am just a fool, I keep the memory of you alive,
Hiding from the crowd, they'll never understand,
But in the end I think I'll survive,
Or is this another illusion?
Another light?
The hope that kept me alive…
Well...I'm waiting for oppinions
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EmkeDiva Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
I hate it, that i'm Dutch, and, I can read it, but don't understand what the most words really mean, so sad.. But i thinking you have real talent! Great job!
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad that you liked my poem even if you didn't understand every word.
Thank you :thanks:
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SlimT Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is a fairly common thought put to good form.
I like your usage of illusion XD when you put it with "is this another illusion?
Another light?" it gives it a really solid substantial feel.

over all fairly solid structure, and it's a nice twist to the subject.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I appreciate. Actually, this a very personal poem and I'm glad about the received reviews ^^
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HyperDeanPie Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Student Digital Artist
It's nice and fitting though there were a few mistakes with the grammar and the rhythm of the poem was a little off. Overall, I liked it and enjoyed the feeling of it. :D
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you enjoyed reading it :aww:
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HyperDeanPie Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Indeed. ^_^
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VisoredFan1293 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2011  Student General Artist
it's very good, i can instantly put it to anime and manga where the girl looses the guy because he turns evil or is just using her and there's still that side of her that wants to believe that the boy is still the same, or he's being a spy,etc.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you;you made a good interpretation :D
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VisoredFan1293 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011  Student General Artist
you are welcome, i had a feeling i did ^_^
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