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Words, words, words... by Kublakhan27

Words by DraganTheMighty

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Sardonic laughers, sick lullabies,
We'll make you pay for all your sins,
With hatred, madness in our eyes.

Welcome to the room 259,
We'll enjoy to see you dyin',
In a comfy, bloody bed,
Well, darling, that's the price for lyin' !

"I just want to see what you've got inside,
You're so pretty on the outside,
I promise you,
Your stomach will be sew,
It will look like new."

In that corner,
A pretty girl is crying,
Fallen on her knees,
To God she's praying,
Screaming out her lungs,
For forgiveness she's begging.
Nobody can't save her now, even God
We have no mercy, we'll love to spill her blood,
We'll rip off her skin to see,
Now how beautiful she can be,
How many hearts she will break again?

We've got nothing to gain,
But it doesn't matter,
We like to make them suffer,
And forever we'll stay alive,
To punish them, to make justice,
Their heads to cleave,
The revenge for the betrayed ones we will bring.

A dying men is crawling on the floor,
He's screaming blood,
While is trying to get to the door.
But he won't get that far,
Because we chopped his leg,
Let's see now who's the lame,
Who's the one with the plague?
We poured acid on his face,
We burst into laugh watching his bloody trace.

Welcome to the room 259,
We'll love to see you sufferin',
Drown you in blood,
Hang you by a gut,
Everything will be alright.
It took me a week to wrote it,but I love it :D
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:iconpsycoblackwidow:
psycoblackwidow Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
yay! nice
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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Aslehill12 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this poem. Violent cruel and awesome. Love dark poetry.
Aslehill12 or Alice Mad Dreamer :)
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you ^^
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betweenhalves Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Student General Artist
I love this poem, I write a lot of poetry as well and should be posting it soon. The dark side of things is always fun to write about.
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you like it. Thanks :D
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NwgroGuerra Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
once again wow
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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NwgroGuerra Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
=D
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zombieater Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
This is hardcore! Some writing you have, other textes of yours are abit obscure, but this one is pure rage. Hey, thanks for faving that sunset of mine!
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :aww:, also, you're welcome :D
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MaKDevotion Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I didn't know i liked this kind of poetry-horror:P-but I really enjoyed this one.The irony of the situation above brought a little smile on the corner of my lips. I feel a bit strange right now for enjoying it but I did! The end xD
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I'm glad you enjoyed it :D
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alme2208 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
O.M.G. O: this is like wow :3 but daaaaaaaaarkish O.O im afraid xDnever going to a room with 259 on the door lmao
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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:iconninjabeancow:
ninjabeancow Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
OMG THIS IS PURE AWESOMNESS!!!!!
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :meow:
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BalanceContradicting Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Student General Artist
I love it too, When I saw the 259 in your handle I expressed the clever smile, lol.
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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:iconfancy-tea:
Fancy-Tea Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2011  Student General Artist
I totally love this :XD: But feel terrible for those 2 :iconsobplz:
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EiraCandles Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2011  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Reminds me of my dreams
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:iconerbear26:
ERbear26 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
wow. This is really well written --Can i ask where you got your inspiration?
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you ^^ Well,it just came from my mind,I don't really know how :XD:
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Argentum-Silva Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Student General Artist
Nice one! I love the gore factor!
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thanks ^^
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:iconhyperdeanpie:
HyperDeanPie Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Wow, that's amazing and really deep. I love it. :D
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks:D
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:iconhyperdeanpie:
HyperDeanPie Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Student Digital Artist
You're very welcome. :D
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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:iconhyperdeanpie:
HyperDeanPie Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Student Digital Artist
:hug:
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:iconlastredapplestanding:
Wow this is AWESOME! :D
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Signature buddies! *high fives*
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LastRedAppleStanding Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
Haha! I didn't realise :P
But i'm not changing it lol :D
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ravenclaw99 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011
this is really good!
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thanks,I appreciate :aww:
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:iconkaieraai:
KaieraAi Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011  Student Writer
What gave you the idea for the room number, if I may ask?
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Honestly,is just a random number,I use it often,is like my favorite number :D
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:iconkaieraai:
KaieraAi Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Student Writer
Ah, that's cool. I was just wondering. I was trying to think of a way I could make it relate to the poem, but I couldn't. ^^;
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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octoberwind0 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
this ...is...sooo...GOOOOOODDDD!!!! i love it i wright some literature myself, but this is pretty good!!!!
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :aww:
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:iconoctoberwind0:
octoberwind0 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem
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Kazocks Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011   General Artist
I....love....it..... :iconrlytearplz:
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I appreciate :)
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MyChemicalRodents Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The gore is just mad, but i found myself attracted to it nonetheless :iconbashplz: Drowning in blood and such - just whoa!! I'm almost afraid
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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FireBasedKiller4913 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011
wow i love this. And i must say, throughout the whole thing i couldnt help but have a smile on my face from the irony i saw.
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D I'm glad you like it :aww:
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:iconfirebasedkiller4913:
FireBasedKiller4913 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011
yep yep i do enjoy bloody tales. XD
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