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Up on the sky,the moonlight is so bright,
But as I look at your face, I can't understand what happened this night.
Your body is cold,but so my heart,
Your flesh is torn apart, but so was  my soul,
When you left me all alone.

Painfull screamings, tears and blood,
Are hauting me tonight,
But it doesn't matter, I don't care,
I can live with all this blame.

Your whacked body lying down there
But trust me, this time,
You ain't going anywhere.

I yelled at you –come back to me!
You said-no,
But I couldn't let this be…
I grabbed your hands and begged you-don't!
You pushed me away, tried to leave again,
With my face soaked in tears I sworn-this ain't gonna be this way…

Blind rage, frustration, broken soul,
This night they took again control,
They blurred my eyes and mind,
Through the shadows of the night,
I've let the anger be my guide…

So I've pulled out the knife,
I stabbed you in the back,
This night I ended your life.
Well,I'm waiting for your opprinions ^^
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WhitePhoenixSpirit Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student General Artist
Love it!
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:thanks:
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dragonflame15 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2011  Student Digital Artist
wow - this is dark but i like it

it's written well and the descriptions are great!!!
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GwenMalfoy Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifuly writen! You do wonderful at painting a picture I love it
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much ^^
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GwenMalfoy Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
your most welcome :D
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LivingInTheMusic Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
love this!!!!!! it is amazing!!
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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LivingInTheMusic Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
np!
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VisoredFan1293 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Student General Artist
like it!!! so reminds me of a Justin LawxOC fanfiction type of thing!!
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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FireBasedKiller4913 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011
moving and dark.
Poetic.
Nice job.
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1littleganster Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011
Powerful, and poetic :nod: (not to mention dark)
I also like your imgery.
The free verse style really works for this ( :
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:iconthfan259:
THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks,I apreciatte ^^
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1littleganster Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011
Welcome~ :hug:
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011
sad end
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myworldinwords Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love the ending. Very dark but beautiful.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :P
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FallenfromtheStarz Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Very wow.Lots of emotion in this one.Third to last paragraph is my absolute favorite.It describes,and unleashes,i like it very much.You have a great way of displaying such acts,i think you just need to add a lil razor cutting description to em and your well on yer way.Just an opinion.
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I apreciate ^^
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Epicaracacy Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Student Writer
So I've pulled out the knife,
I stabbed you in the back,
This night I ended your life.,

Just a matter of fact you know, i killed you in stuff :D

On a more serious note, this is awesome
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Aw,thank you :)
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sighingawaysaturday Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love how it's so powerful.
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kallia-goldenwings Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011
love the imagery
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
^^ I'm glad
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